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Story Analysis for Fiction Writers
Stop revising blind. Start revising smart.
You've finished your draft. Now you're stuck wondering: does this story actually work? Are there plot holes you can't see? Do your characters need more depth? Should you revise this for six more months or is it ready?
Here's the truth: most authors waste months revising in the wrong direction because they don't know what's actually broken.
I offer professional story analysis that gives you structural feedback at the stage when it matters most - early, when changes are still easy to make.
You get clear direction. You stop guessing. Your book gets stronger.
First 3,000 words analyzed absolutely free
Why Get Story Analysis Early?
Here's why you should get story analysis before anything else:
What Happens To Other Authors:
- 1. Finish draft
- 2. Spend 2-3 months revising blindly, guessing what needs fixing
- 3. Hunt for beta readers (post in groups, beg friends, bribe family...)
- 4. Wait weeks (sometimes months) for responses
- 5. Get vague feedback: "I liked the main character but something felt off"
- 6. Get conflicting feedback: One person loved the pacing, another thought it dragged
- 7. Revise again based on guesses, still not sure if you're fixing the right things
- 8. Post on Reddit asking "Is my manuscript ready?" Get 47 different answers
- 9. Hire a $2,000-3,000 developmental editor out of frustration
- 10. Spend 4-6 months doing major structural rewrites
- 11. Seek more beta readers to validate changes
- 12. Finally move forward (exhausted, broke, and burned out)
Total time: 8-12 months
Total cost: $2,500 - 3,500+
Emotional toll: high
What Happens To My Clients:
- 1. Finish draft
- 2. Revision pass to tighten the story
- 3. Get story analysis ($200-$1000)
- 4. Revise once with clear structural direction
- 5. Send to beta readers for reader experience (knowing structure is solid)
- 6. Make minor tweaks based on beta input
- 7. Continue on to the next stage of your publishing journey
Total time: 3-6 months
Total cost: $200 - $1000
Confidence level: High
Is This For You?
You're in the right place if:
- You've finished a draft but aren't sure if the story actually works
- You're stuck and need direction for your next revision
- You’re still finding your story and looking for guidance on how to proceed
- You've gotten feedback before but it was too vague to be useful
- You've studied the craft but can't figure out how to apply it to YOUR story
- You're preparing to self-publish or query agents and want to ensure your book is strong first
This isn't for you if:
- Your manuscript is still a rough first draft that needs basic editing before it's readable (clean it up first, then come back!)
- Your manuscript needs grammar or copyediting (I focus on story, not sentences)
- You want someone to rewrite your book for you (I give direction; you do the revisions)
- You're not open to honest feedback about what needs improvement
Your manuscript should be readable: clear grammar and sentence structure. I don't expect perfection, just a draft polished enough to follow. If you're still on a 'vomit draft,' take another pass to clean it up so your book feels finished, complete, and ready to stand on its own.
Is This Too Good To Be True?
With everyone on the internet trying to make a quick buck off the next person, why should you trust me?
I get it. You've probably seen:
- Cheap services on Fiverr that promise professional feedback for $50
- Beta readers who disappeared after you sent your manuscript
- Critique partners who gave feedback that made things worse
You're wondering: Is this another waste of money?
Here's why this is different:
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1. You see my work before paying anything.
Send me your trickiest chapter (up to 3,000 words). If my feedback doesn't click with you, you got free insight and lost nothing. -
2. You see sample reports from real clients.
Download them. Read them. See exactly what level of analysis you're getting. -
3. All my early clients came back for more.
Either for Revision Reads or their next manuscript. That doesn't happen if the feedback doesn't deliver.
See My Work First
Download free resources to see exactly how I analyze manuscripts before you commit.
Self-Edit Checklist
Free Resource
A comprehensive checklist covering the same story elements I analyze in my reports. Designed for self-editing.
Download ChecklistStory Analysis Overview
Contemporary Fiction
A simplified overview of a full story analysis report, showing my process and feedback style.
Read SampleWhat Authors Are Saying
"She found every flaw I didn’t see - from character inconsistencies to plot holes - and my work is so much better for it."
"It was like giving me a lantern to light a dark path. Now I know where to go next and why I'm going there."
"She was so thorough that the document she sent back rivaled mine!"
"She delivered five days ahead of time... She was able to explain her thoughts and suggestions very clearly - both in the report and on call."
"The best thing about this service was her little comments peppered all over my manuscript. It was such a joy reading them and seeing her gush over my characters!"
"I was stuck on plot and pacing issues for months. After her critique, I could see exactly what was working and what was not. Absolutely invaluable!"
What It Costs
Pricing scales with word count. Longer manuscripts require more time and care to ensure the story shines.
Use the calculator below for an exact quote.
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| Tier | Word Count | Price Range | Delivery |
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| Quick Read | Up to 30k | $200 | ~5 days |
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Perfect for novellas or trying the service out. Full credit applies toward a complete manuscript analysis |
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| Standard Novel | 30k - 60k | $200 - $450 | ~14 days |
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| Lengthy Tale | 60k - 90k | $450 - $800 | ~21 days |
| Longer manuscripts with full story depth | |||
| Epic Journey | 90k - 120k | $800 - $1,200 | ~28 days |
| Epic-length novels with complex narratives | |||
Remember: First 3,000 words read FREE
Delivery times are estimates and may vary based on current workload
Manuscripts over 120,000 words require custom pricing — contact me for a quote
How It Works
1
Free Sample (No Strings Attached)
Send me the chapter you're most worried about. Include a few sentences of context (what happens before/after this chapter) so I understand where it fits in your story.
I'll analyze it completely free. You'll get a good sense of how I work. Within 48 hours, you'll know if we're a good fit.
2
We Connect
If we're both ready to move forward, we'll finalize a simple contract covering timelines, deliverables, confidentiality, and payment.
Everything is transparent and straightforward.
Payment is via PayPal Xoom.
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Share Your Manuscript
Send me your full manuscript via Google Docs or Word. If you have specific questions or concerns about your story, include those too and I'll address them in your report.
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Get Your Feedback
Within 28 days, you will receive your feedback in the form of:
- Your manuscript with detailed in-line comments
- Comprehensive story analysis report (8-18 pages)
- Answers to your specific questions
5
Follow-Up Call
Take time to digest the feedback (no rush!) then book your complimentary hour-long call.
We can discuss revision strategy, brainstorm solutions to story problems, talk through your characters, or address anything from the report. The time is yours to use however helps you most.
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Revise with Confidence
No more guessing. No more revising in circles. You'll know exactly what's broken, why it's not working, and how to fix it.
When you're done revising, you can come back for a Revision Read at 50% off the original price! I'll re-read your manuscript to ensure your changes hold up and your story is ready for the next stage.
Questions You Might Have
Beta readers give opinions and emotional reactions: "I liked this," "I was confused here." Helpful for gauging reader experience, but it doesn't tell you why something isn't working or how to fix it. I give diagnostic feedback: "Your protagonist's motivation is unclear in chapter 3, which is why readers might not buy this choice. Here are three ways to fix it." Think of beta readers as test audiences. I'm the doctor diagnosing what's making your story sick.
Developmental editors work on later drafts and often provide prescriptive solutions - rewriting passages, restructuring chapters, suggesting specific changes. I work on early drafts and give diagnostic feedback with multiple solution options. You maintain full creative control. Most clients find they can skip developmental editing after working with me and move straight on to the next stage of their publishing journey.
Absolutely! Three ways:
- Send me 3,000 words free — see my feedback style on YOUR manuscript with zero commitment
- Download sample reports — read anonymized examples from past clients
- Read my essays on Reddit — see how I think about story craft
I work with YA, middle grade, and adult fiction across most genres - especially narrative-heavy stories where character, plot, and worldbuilding matter. During the free sample analysis, I'll let you know if your story and genre are a good match. If we're not a fit, I'll tell you honestly.
I work with complete manuscripts only. Your story needs a beginning, middle, and end so I can properly assess plot structure, pacing, and whether your ending pays off the setup. Still writing or on draft one? Finish up, do a quick copy and line edit pass, and come back!
Your story is yours. I'm here to point out blind spots and offer solutions, but you make all the final decisions. Good feedback gives you options, not orders.
Perfect! I can help you make sense of conflicting feedback and identify the real structural issues beneath surface-level comments.
Absolutely. I’ll help identify weak spots that might cause agents to pass, and make sure your opening chapters are strong.
No. I focus exclusively on story-level analysis—structure, character, pacing, plot logic. Once revised, you’ll want a copyeditor for grammar and sentence-level polish.
Perfect! That’s a Revision Read, offered at 50% off for returning clients. I’ll re-read your manuscript to make sure changes work and the story flows.
Everything is covered in our contract. Your unpublished work is private and protected.
I use PayPal Xoom or Western Union (buyer's choice!) for secure international payments.
Payment is due upfront for all tiers. For custom arrangements, email me to discuss options.
Download sample reports, send me 3,000 words free, read testimonials, or check my Substack and Reddit. If we're not a fit after the free sample, you got valuable feedback at zero risk.
Read My Writing. I Don't Just Analyze Stories, I Write Them
Want to see if I understand story from the inside out? I publish in two places:
Craft Essays on Reddit
Mini-essays about plot, character, pacing, worldbuilding, and everything that makes fiction work. Handpicked from my personal story journal and pulled from questions I see writers asking.
Fiction on Substack
Short stories, novelettes, and longer fiction showcasing character work, structure, and voice.
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